just beyond the stone wall

Finally, the sun. It comes on like birds, an endless flock of them swirling up into the sky. And there are birds. You are on your bike at the base of a hill. You are sweating. There is a barn off in the distance, and the birds rise up like leaves caught in a whirlwind. They spiral the air, and you believe they are leaves at first, some miraculous and strange gift of the earth. You wonder why they do not crash up into the air like this by your house, for you could stand watching for hours. And then you know they are birds, and you laugh.
Rain. The rain that will put skin on the bones of the skeleton trees. The green begins to rise from the earth, flowers showing the tips of their heads. And though it is cold still, spring has arrived. You have left the garage on your bike many times, and ponder the purchase of a long-sleeved, wool jersey.
They predict a heavy snowstorm this weekend and you have come to revel in the absurdity. You feel you could punch away here all morning, but a trip to the grocery store demands your attention. So you leave. You will come home and have lunch in the cold sun. You will play guitar. Sing. Watch the green come alive. Bugs flitting. Bees and beetles. Ladybugs, red with life.
{still no conclusions about this place} {none} {but you can feel them looming like warriors, just beyond the stone wall}
Posted by jeff pitcher at April 22, 2005 10:12 AM
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For christ's sake! No more second person narration. JESUS! You're killing me. And no more bird and leaves imagery either. You've beaten that metaphor into freaking limp submission.
Otherwise, great work.
Posted by: errggg at April 22, 2005 10:56 AM
I say use whatever metaphors you damn well please. When the words come it - it is up to you to interpret them. What others think of it... its theirs to deal with. Thanks for sharing... it was a beautiful perspective on a day when i needed just such a perspective...
Posted by: Jennifer at April 24, 2005 08:46 AM
Great photo, I like it too. *And* I liked the bird image. I've studied literature for years so take my word for it :)
Posted by: Anja at April 26, 2005 12:34 PM
Great photo, I like it too. *And* I liked the bird image. I've studied literature for years so take my word for it :)
Posted by: Anja at April 26, 2005 12:34 PM
ooops. Be aware of laptop mouse buttons. Accidents happen so easily... sorry about that
Posted by: Anja at April 26, 2005 12:35 PM
jeff fantastic stuff, get ahold of me soon I have no #'s, addressses, nothing... (long story)talk later. peace, much love, steve
Posted by: steve at May 2, 2005 05:25 PM
Miss your posts... but glad you're out there living life.
all the best,
d
Posted by: desmene at May 4, 2005 07:20 AM